@seaofsilvers @littletoolatte @sunsetstaring LMAO ESSAY MATERIAL. (BTW ANNIE AS IN ANNIE YOU KNOW, ALL MY SONS)
Gender in Sports Gender in sports has been an issue ever since sports were invented. In the early years sports were played by the men,
To start off, your essay title is very clear and straight forward which I like. In regards to your introduction, I like how you start it off mentioning all the numbers and the history of sports as a whole. Your quote in the introduction is very effective and sets the mood for the rest of the essay. I also like how you mention discrimination not only applies to women but also men in sports. The only thing I recommend is maybe rewording your thesis to make it stronger. It should be more of a statement then the way you put it. “I argue, sports are overly sexualized, which leads to the gender inequality we see today in athletics.” If you were to change how you lead into the thesis, it could possibly make it stronger. I enjoy your first body paragraph discussing how advertisement overly sexualize the sport clothing or equipment. It so true and your quote really does personify the paragraph by saying that its socially acceptable for women to be represented as an object and not a hard working athlete. You then go on to mention that the salaries of NBA players and WNBA players are vastly different and how its unequal. You do well by mentioning the counter argument that the fan size isn’t as big so they wouldn’t be able to get paid as much. Overall the essay flows very well from topic to topic, however maybe in the introduction you could be more specific to what the essay is going to discuss.